GREAT START ON DRAFT, BUT IT UNKNOWN WHAT YOUR METAPHOR IS. IS IT A MAGNIFYING GLASS OR BOOK OR MYSTERY BOOK? YOU NEED TO MAKE IT CLEARER. MAYBE CHANGING IT TO A COVER OF A MYSTERY BOOK OR ADDING SOMETHING FROM YOUR POEM THAT WILL MAKE IT KNOWN YOU ARE A MYSTERY BOOK. AS(2)
I liked your idea of being in the magnifying glass but I think you need to find a way to clarify that your relating yourself to a mystery book. I think your should also put your metaphor in to the picture. I really liked your whole idea, it was very creative! (:
GREAT START ON DRAFT, BUT IT UNKNOWN WHAT YOUR METAPHOR IS. IS IT A MAGNIFYING GLASS OR BOOK OR MYSTERY BOOK? YOU NEED TO MAKE IT CLEARER. MAYBE CHANGING IT TO A COVER OF A MYSTERY BOOK OR ADDING SOMETHING FROM YOUR POEM THAT WILL MAKE IT KNOWN YOU ARE A MYSTERY BOOK. AS(2)
ReplyDeleteMaybe you should use a very well known Mystery book maybe like the 39 Clues or other known ones.
ReplyDeleteI liked your idea of being in the magnifying glass but I think you need to find a way to clarify that your relating yourself to a mystery book. I think your should also put your metaphor in to the picture. I really liked your whole idea, it was very creative! (:
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